Transformation Tuesday
One foot in front of the other,
Bright pink toes peeping out from
under
My long, flowy skirt.
Smoothed hair and touched-up
makeup,
Smiling brightly and eagerly
waving
At a friend at the end of the
hallway,
I know what some of them are
rightfully thinking.
I’d hate to be around when she breaks a nail.
One foot in front of the other,
Black Nike’s make their way into
my safe haven.
High fives and fist bumps.
You are one of us.
A homemade cutoff T-shirt reveals
Years of blood, sweat, and
occasional tears.
Rounded shoulders and popping
quads.
I am not strong…for a girl. I am strong.
Music pumps through my headphones
And through my veins.
I am electricity.
Nothing can stop me.
Take my squat rack, I dare you.
I am on a mission.
It’s me versus the world,
You can’t match my ambition.
I like the contrast between the first and second stanzas and that you start with the same line. I think it works really well together and sets up a change in tone that is appropriate. I really love the last line because it really shows the difference between the character in the very first stanza and throughout the rest of the poem.
ReplyDeleteI like how it is cheesy but cute and it flows very well. I agree with everything Sade said ^ !!
ReplyDeleteI really like the contrast between the 2 stanzas. It shows a lot of imagery and detail, I like the poem!
ReplyDeleteInitially the title caught my attention. I like the imagery in the first two stanza's. The character's tone is really confident and effectively displayed in the last stanza. A transformation is clearly depicted in the poem.
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