Home
Where men in big trucks lift
three fingers off the steering wheel
To say hello down a two-lane back
road.
Where rumors spread faster than
the scent of cow manure
Spread over fields in the spring
time.
Where a four way stop is the
closest thing to an intersection.
Take the road between the little store and the old fire house. You’ll
see nothing but fields for two miles.
Where the neighbor’s cows replace
the need for an alarm clock.
“MOOOOO”. 6 A.M. on the dot.
Where going into “town” means
driving 25 minutes to the closest Walmart,
Where you cannot leave without
seeing a dozen people you know.
Where thick dust from
corn-plowing combines completely covers your car
Right after you just washed it.
Where a sky on fire over an open
green field
Takes your breath and worries
away.
This will always be home.
Remember to put the punctuation inside the quotation marks. I like the images and how they seem very insignificant but yet that are the things that what make home for you. I think you can add just a tiny bit more imagery to the images by addressing smells or touch.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Sade, I especially like the line with rumors and spreading like cow manure. I can imagine these very well with the sounds and smells you included.
ReplyDeleteI agree with both Pariis and Sade, it has a lot of imagery and I can relate to your hometown. I like how you said about the closest Walmart because it allows the reader to picture the distance.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Sade, the imagery can be heightened. I like how structured the poem is and the isolation of the last line, it intensifies the speakers emotion toward the home.
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