Revised Version of "Every Life Matters" and an attempt at a BOP Poem
Charm City
Beer bottles and burning buildings were
collecting casualties as smog and smoke
blanketed over the endless sky. Countless crowds
cried out for justice with nothing, but raised voices.
This was Charm City.
Viral videos of violence and brutality,
City after city, death after death,
restless citizens agitated and anxious
await the long foreseen acquittal.
Civilians now compromised by the hurt
and hatred, painted by naïve, juvenile brothers
who forgot that all together, they’d be labeled
as nothing but animals and straight beggars.
This was Charm City.
To banish the broken, big brother enlisted
men and women in uniform to unite.
Submit or surrender, and comply with curfew
Build businesses back up, bottom to top
Communities come together and with limited choices
To cry out for justice with nothing, but raised voices.
This is charm city.
I like this poem! It gives you a lot of detail and imagery. I can also place myself in Baltimore without having to be there, the poem holds a lot of emotion
ReplyDeleteYou have so much powerful language in here. I really like it. Your first stanza is saturated with alliteration, awesome! I liked your original, but this might have to top it!
ReplyDeleteGreat job with repetition and establishing the tone. You have clear images and a lot of interesting sounds throughout. I really like it!
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