It's my second home.
The place I go to relieve stress,
where I have the most fun.
The sound of little and big pitter patter on the dance room floor.
Tapping and slapping all around the room.
Great vibes and little to no tension around.
It's warm and cozy.
And feels just like home.
I spent six hours a day here and 10 on the weekends.
"I can't because I have dance" was my favorite line.
What I smell and what you smell are different,
the smell of underarm sweat
no longer bothers me because it's embedded in my nose.
Waling up o the red door that says "Progressive Center for Dance"
was the highlight of my day. Walking up the steps and hearing
the sounds of Hi's and Hello's and being warmingly welcomed every day.
The sound of Ballet music in one room
and Jazz in another soothes my spirit.
A place that properly shows and expresses
"Live.Laugh.Love".
The brown paneling on the wall,
the big mural of PCD on the wall of the dressing room,
painted in different bright colors of the rainbow.
The wood floors, long wide mirrors around the room.
Ballet bar that sits on the window ledge,
the desk where I'm greeted by the owner's sisters,
the small room where all little feet that I teach
dance and prance around. The pictures from past recitals
and trophies from the competition team.
All hold a special place in my heart.
The place that I spend most of my time.
Dance school.
My home away from home.
I really like the amount of sound you used in this poem, and also the imagery is great. I feel like I am the dance studio
ReplyDeleteThe childlike voice is clearly established through sounds such as "pitter patter". You have good breaks, but I would break up the 5th stanza more to add emphasis on the images described.
ReplyDeleteI think the last stanza was the strongest in my opinion. I like the listing and I also like the last line and the title. Like Ashley and Brajion said the sounds really add to the poem. I think you could have used more of it.
ReplyDeleteYou give great description in the last long stanza! Made me wish I danced.. Your use of sound at the beginning was great. Try to incorporate even more throughout the rest!
ReplyDelete