A wave flows uncontrollably in different directions
and fades away
Just the way we were.
We had great times,
others we were just associates.
Now we speak utter silence to one another.
The moments we shared I do cherish,
now that you are not around.
Blind to the love I have for you,
you push me away.
One of the people I thought would always be there.
Says what you need to do but never been there to help you through
The few good times fade away.
I wish you were around to see the young woman I am becoming.
You're alive,
but our relationship is dead.
Hoping to revive it,
I'm troubled just a little bit,
to find the words to express how I feel.
Still I just want to be real.
Come back into my life.
I wanted you to be the one to walk me down the aisle,
but you treat me so foul
at time.
You say not getting a phone call for Christmas is the reason you're mad.
But little did I know it was just an excuse for you not to be my dad.
I really liked this poem during workshop! I think the stanza flow much better and its easier for the reader to read
ReplyDeleteThe rhythm and sound is really nice in this poem. There is really good breaks and the tone is clearly established. The motion throughout the poem is nice and corresponds to the wave flowing imagery in the first stanza.
ReplyDeleteOkay I got a little emotional when you read this in class. This piece is really personal but tamed, not overly emotional. "We speak utter silence to one another." Great line. Well, the poem is full of them. Very powerful ending.
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