#OG...
[Looking up at the red
light]... Next time y'all wake up late, you're walking you’re a**es
up to school.
LOVE YOU MANDERS!
Seven
twenty a.m. *bell rings*
Damn it! My mom's going
to kill me if I'm late ... again.. [sigh]
Calm down! It's only
your second ...I already have morning detention L-O-L! *Scrolling through my Facebook*
My
philosophy: Why rush to school? Rushing can cause accidents. It is THE LAW to
stop at a red light.
Pulling into the black
top, a Howard County police car as well as my principal’s car were in their reserved parking spot. The front row,
closest to the school, was filled with all of the teacher’s cars with couple of
exceptions, those who think it is cool to get to school a little bit earlier to
park a little closer... haha not!
Mander's parked super
crooked... in a tiny little spot.... Maybe because she's super tiny, she parked
like that? I honestly did not understand...
Reaching into my North
Face backpack, I pulled out a blank sheet of paper and pen. And not just any pen, but a BLACK pen because adults and professionals use black for document, according to my CNA teacher. Cracking my
knuckles and warming up my hands, I hunched over the hood of the silver civic, and the pen began to move...
April 1, 2013
To whom it may concern,
Please excuse my daughter, Pariis, from being tardy. She was not
feeling well last night and took a drowsy medication. If you have any questions
or concerns, please feel free to call me at 443 *** ****.
Thank You,
[Xeuforia Yi signature]
Xeuforia Yi
Sincerely Perry! I’m all done, I’ll see you guys inside.
Can you write mine
too?
REALLY RANYA?!
... Fine...
I like the emphasis that you placed on the small things like the type of backpack, the specific pen etc. Continue putting the small details in the rest of the piece and putting your own thoughts too. The thoughts give a sense of who you are and are funny to read.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Sade's comment about details, I think it'll really push your piece and create more imagery and density. I like the different voices you created through the narration, the note, and the character Ranya. The teenage voice is clear through the use of phrases like "lol".
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